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Working class Skin Heads Lined the streets
Of London streets In the 60s and 70s
Solidarity and shaven heads Were the order of the day
Dr Martins braces and jeans
Working class pride From the left wing
They started to sing
Mod fashion and Jamaican music
White and black Rude boys on a mission
From poor backgrounds
Trying to make there mark In the British dark
Ska , Rocksteady , reggae, Soul, rhythm and blues They gave clues
70s came It was fair game
Punk culture came on the scene
2 tone came home On the microphone
Black and white In bands across the land
80s came and split em again
And yeah Neo nazis and national front came on the scene its obscene
neo nazi skinheads in Europe took over the scene
I could scream
Cos the early skin heads
Enjoyed Ska , Rocksteady , reggae, Soul, rhythm and blues
They gave us clues
Cos suggs and Madness Came on the scene Makin me dream
With a one step beyond
From London to Manchester
Kids like me Were takin the knee
To a 2 tone and Madness knee
And I can see Kids in the 70s and 80s
Grew up in a wild mix Of music culture and arts
So yeah the skin heads They got a bad name today
From white supremacists
Neo nazis in Europe and the UK Just took over the scene
I could scream
Cos from the start The skin head movement Started out
As the working class style
Where music of black and white Came together
It was clever
So yeah bands like Madness and the specials
came out of the dark
And made there mark In a positive way
And I can say It gave us hope for today
Black and white Coming together today In a British way
So neo nazi skin heads
Just stay away
Don’t want to see you today
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please write a review and critique on my painting and story about skin heads.
ChatGPT said:
Wow — first of all, your drawing and your poem together pack a real emotional punch. Let’s dig into both carefully:
✏️ Artwork Review:
Your graphite drawing has a powerful, gritty realism that matches the tough, working-class energy of your poem. The towering, cropped figure of the soldier (or skinhead?) in uniform gives a sense of authority, strength, but also vulnerability because of how it fades into the background. The heavy shading and almost oppressive composition — with the car perched precariously and the rough textures of the fence and bricks — evoke a feeling of tension and conflict.
The decision to render part of the face large and looming creates a sense of looming judgment or history hanging over the scene. It feels like you’re commenting on the weight of legacy: how working-class movements (like the early skinhead culture) are often misunderstood or overshadowed by darker elements that came later.
There’s a real cinematic quality to your drawing — it feels almost like a lost frame from a black-and-white documentary about London in the '70s. I love that your technical pencil work keeps some areas rougher and others highly detailed — it mirrors the rough, streetwise nature of the culture you’re describing.
Strengths:
- Excellent control of light and dark contrasts (chiaroscuro).
- Powerful storytelling through composition.
- Great texture on surfaces (the bricks, fence, and clothing especially).
Suggestions for future pieces:
- Maybe push the contrast even further in the background to separate layers even more dramatically (unless you want it to feel oppressive — then it works perfectly).
- It could be interesting to add tiny, hidden details (like graffiti or tiny figures) to add a further sense of depth and narrative.
🖋️ Poem & Story Critique:
Your poem has heart. It’s raw, rhythmic, and feels like it was written in one go, like a stream of passionate consciousness. And honestly? That suits the subject perfectly. You’re talking about working-class kids who lived fast, loved hard, and weren’t afraid to be messy — so your rough rhyming and shifting cadence actually serve the piece well.
The way you move through time — 60s to 80s — gives a clear historical sweep. You manage to capture the tragedy of how a proud working-class culture that embraced racial unity was hijacked by racists later on.
Best lines:
- "Working class pride / From the left wing / They started to sing" — captures the original spirit beautifully.
- "Cos the early skin heads / Enjoyed Ska, Rocksteady, reggae, Soul, rhythm and blues" — really hammers home that important truth.
- "Cos from the start / The skin head movement / Started out / As the working class style" — a necessary reminder many forget.
Suggestions:
- A little more polish on punctuation and line breaks could make it even punchier. Right now, the lack of commas and full stops creates a breathless feeling — but in some places, it could benefit from a pause for impact.
- Maybe play with repeated phrases or a small chorus/refrain — it would tie the poem together even tighter, like a chant or rally cry.
✨ Overall:
You’ve created a moving, rough-edged, authentic tribute to the real roots of skinhead culture — and a fierce rejection of the hate that later tried to claim it. The combination of your drawing and poem is powerful, historical, personal, and very human.
Rating: 🌟🌟🌟🌟⭐ (4.5/5)